Wikipedia:Peer review/Dr Disrespect/archive1

Dr Disrespect

I've listed this article for peer review because, first and foremost, I have been heavily contributing to the article (at first anonymously, as 2601:47:100:ac40:...) and hoping to get it to B-class. I think it is right now, but as @PresN: noted at WT:VG#Dr Disrespect, despite some cleanup and copyediting, which is always helpful there are "choppy paragraphs, choppy sentences, a flow so close to WP:Proseline that it's almost uncanny, and most of all almost no information about the person that isn't just a list of controversies". @Sergecross73: added that they currently have "no interest in writing about these ridiculous, over-the-top gaming personalities. Doubly so with someone with the allegations against him he's got going on at the moment". At the article's talk itself, I suggested that there should be a screenshot of a livestream, which was opposed by @Axem Titanium: because both images have Beahm "wearing the same wig and sunglasses he always wears and "He looks like the same middle-aged white dude in both photos to me. I have a hard time imagining readers not believing that they're the same person". There is also a slight contention over a few citations between me and @Rock & roll is not dead:, particularly over Kick (service).

Thanks, 2601AC47 (talk) 15:59, 15 July 2024 (UTC)

...Why was my lack of interest in YouTubers included in the status update of this article...? Sergecross73 msg me 16:33, 15 July 2024 (UTC)

That was what you pointed out to me. Like I said then, I was hoping that participants of the Wikiproject maybe interested. And despite now almost being nothing to add since the streamer's removal from the YT partner program and almost no word from him, there is still interest in the article's improvement. Also, if you're still wondering about his controversies, no, I've not found a good place for them. 2601AC47 (talk) 16:54, 15 July 2024 (UTC)

Right, I just don't understand what my comment indicating I wasn't interested in contributing to the article at the Wikiproject discussion does to benefit this peer review. I've made zero contributions to the article. Sergecross73 msg me 18:05, 15 July 2024 (UTC)

And I'm not asking you to do so. Just quoting.

In any case, brief history: On March 19, 2018, Valoem created the article as seen here. It was briefly subjected for deletion in late April that year; with 7 keeps, 1 move to draft and no deletes, it was kept incontrovertibly in May. By then, it looked like this. 2 years later, after he was banned from Twitch, it looked like this. It was semiprotected for the first time afterwards (currently it is through August).

Progressing every mid-year onward: 2021; 2022; 2023; and before a reason was released by Cody Conners in 2024. Each time, it was proven to be notable. I first edited it in July 2020; one little edit in September 2023 here; and my first in a line of 50+ edits on June 29. All in good faith and with the intent to improve this to meet the B-class criteria, which I think definitely does unless proven otherwise. 2601AC47 (talk) 19:19, 15 July 2024 (UTC)

Comments from Z1720

Comments after a quick skim:

• Try to merge the one-sentence paragraphs with other information.
• The "Permanent ban from Twitch and fallout" section is quite long: is there a way to shorten this or split it up?
• "Dr Disrespect is a fan of the Golden State Warriors of the NBA, seen at games at Oracle Arena and Chase Center." This probably belongs in "Personal life" unless this is related to his career.
• Any additional images of the person to add to the article?

I hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 21:20, 18 July 2024 (UTC)

LunaEclipse

Going to review this article's sources. lunaeclipse ^(talk) 20:48, 24 July 2024 (UTC)

• I would remove the Dexerto citations and replace them as they are not considered reliable for use in biographies